Who's opinion - first time writer

Those are refined hillbillies. You need to spend time with some real Appalachian hillbillies. The kind that think “running water” is the stuff in the creek after a storm. The kind that think a mullet is a modern hair style. The ones that think Nascar is a real sport. The kind that think “BYOB” means that the beer they brought is for them alone and so they bought an extra cooler for the next day’s recovery efforts.

I could go on, but I don’t want any locals accusing me to discussing them online with out their permission…

REFINED!!!? :open_mouth: :confused: :laughing: :laughing: :laughing:

Would “posh” be better?

WB Yeats Summer School, Co. Sligo Eire youtube.com/watch?v=a7_NNNPgyrU

interesting…

As the ship’s psychologist, I’d proffer the tentative diagnosis of, Masochism. The majority of Scriv’s ill informed members of crew would call it Kinky

Do Take care
Dr Mulality.

Or he’s nuts. Plain old, simply nuts. Maybe a walnut. All shriveled and bitter on the inside… Likely roasted and salted too. Aussies aren’t known for being smart enough to stay out of the sun and off the beach… Neither are “Damn Yankees*” though …

[size=85]* My official designation once folks realized “Damn, Yankee aint going back north…”[/size]

I meant to reply to your great comment earlier but got diverted by the ‘noise’ in the thread. I agree with your comments to a great degree.
Finding someone suitable to give us feedback is extremely difficult I have learned from here and other forums. Not only do we need to find someone who understands and appreciates the style/genre, but someone who knows how to give feedback, and who to do so according to the guidelines we request. I was lucky with this person I recently chose. I sent him five strict instructions on what I wanted him to feedback on and I think that that has worked extremely well.

Attempting to move from “noise generator” to “not so helpful contributor” (the most I can hope for)…

What about a professional reader? I know Floss can be brutal but does this type of thing for a living (much later in the process than you may be). I’m sure there are folks that work with folks at the point you are at. The cost would be the big thing in my opinion.

:open_mouth: WOT NOISE!?

As I mentioned above the old friend that I spoke of originally turned out to be a great success. My goals were intentionally limited. I didn’t really want to know if he liked it. I asked about structure, focus, meandering plot, basic structure. A kind of bottom-up view. My last question to him was this:
“If you had picked it up in the airport as something to read on the plane, would you have any reason to think that it wasn’t by a competent, reasonably talented, writer whether you liked it or not ?”
I feel that once I clear that hurdle, it’s really up to me and my up-to-now-imagined talent :laughing:

Before the OT drifts away on a stream of hillbilly jests, :open_mouth: I’d like to add some thoughts on the qualities of readers and writers. It’s a delicate topic, fraught with pitfalls, and absolutely crucial to a writer’s confidence, but there are no guarantees or sure-fire formulas concerning reader reactions.

For a sampling, take a look at the “reviews” that appear on Goodreads or Amazon. Much depends on a reader’s experience, personality, intelligence, and generosity. “It sucks” is the usual response of readers to anything that’s old, long, or using a vocabulary above the Minimum Functional that prevails in today’s USA.

Add to that situation the fact that most readers want something familiar, not new or experimental. They go for formulas, cliches, conventions; the “nice easy read” that is mildly interesting and has a brisk pace.

In truth, professional editors are not much better. All they want to do is sell, and they are convinced that books need to be in standard genre categories, be easy to describe, and sell by word of mouth, since they no longer market or advertise adult fiction, unless it’s selling like 50 Shades.

The publisher cynicism about readers is profound: they are assumed to be 10th-grade minds, living dull, safe lives, and they most want to experience vicariously sex and violence, plus glorious triumph and fabulous income. Female readers are a special category of consumers, hence the popularity of romance, relationship sagas, misery memoirs, and you-dirty-rat diatribes about fickle or philandering men. (Ask any editor who sells to the book-club market.)

Then we finally come to friends. Do not expect friends to greet your literary product with warm, sympathetic, and discerning advice. The primary reaction is jealousy and incredulity: how can that bozo, whom I’ve known for years, produce anything original or compelling? No, no, this just can’t be. What you learn about “friends” is that they see you in preconceived categories, and that your success or achievement reflects badly on their own lives. Hence the reader who said a writer’s sentences are too long. Reminds me of the emperor’s response to Mozart: too many notes, Mr. M, too many notes.

If you’re an academic, the response from colleagues is hostility, denial, or silence. But academics are sub-human, if not monsters, in that they focus on specialities and rarely have general interests. Hence their contempt for journalists and anything popular, until a work finally enters established canons.

On the other hand, miracles do occur, and some readers are amazing. They see what the writer was trying to do, appreciate it, and often glimpse far greater possibilities. If they are generous enough to write and post their views, all the better. And even more miraculous, long after your book is remaindered and selling for pence in a bargain bin, readers find and revive it again. Words endure.

The very odd thing about writing is that many think they can do it, and that it’s therefore somehow easy. If they can talk, they believe they can write. How often has someone said to you, “I could write a book one day,” or “I’ve got some stories in me that I should tell”? I would not discourage anyone from trying to climb this glass mountain, just advise that you need to be tough, patient, and confident that it’s all worth while. Here endeth the sermon. And apologies to anyone who is a good, generous, and empathic reader, like most folks in this forum, especially vic-k and his merry band of followers. 8) 8)

That’s what I used to think. Then I realized that “writing” and “talking” are bastard children of communication. I don’t that universally, but for me. I can communicate, but not in writing and not by talking IN MY NATURAL SELF.

And that’s the difference. Good “writers” are actually good communicators that happen to be using written word as the medium. The majority of us can’t really communicate and our speaking and written words prove it.

Great post druid. Interesting and educational. I do detect a whiff of cynicism creeping into your life somewhere along the line and I suspect much of it is based on sound experience. I would only say this, remember that the vast majority of readers never write a review and often never even talk about books they have enjoyed. In the last 18 months I have read about 45 books that I have enjoyed immensely. I haven’t discussed or expressed my response ot a single one of them with anyone. Nor have I posted a review of one. I just don’t know people who have an interest in that kind of conversation.

The thing about friends/acquaintances is this, imho. Most people when they read do not verbalise how they respond to a book good or bad, even to their own inner voice. It’s either good and shit. So asking friends/acquaintances to review our writing can be asking for something that they simply have no idea how to do. Hence the confusion, and at times I am sure, jealousy or angst.

On the oft regurgitated view of people thinking they can write, I have my own view and it’s probably not popular among 'writers.
I think LOTS of people have great stories a great tales to tell, some real and some imagined, and LOTS of people could write great books. What makes a writer who actually finishes and sells a book is not always writing talent. Not by a long way. In my view it is far far more mundane. Writing a book is hard bloody work and not just that, it is sustained hard work, both physical and mental. It also requires planning like a professional’s project planning. Most people already have a job and life is tough.
People who have actually finished a book or books and have sold some are not an elite of talent. They an elite of perseverance and dedication … built on a bedrock of variable talent, that is not restricted to them alone.

saoir, or Michael, 'tis Michael, isn’t it?

Do you consider yourself too good for [size=150]"[/size]writing groups[size=150]"[/size] to be of any use to you?

How do you know that your exec buddy’s opinions are any more valid than those you would’ve received from a writing group, at your local library, for instance? You as a member of the aforementioned group, would have the opportunity to pose those exact same questions to the group members, having first presented them with the rationale behind them. It is possible that you would have received a variety of answers, all with something positive to add (as in ‘constructive’), and pertinent to your initial request.

Before you throw the rule book through the window, it’s advisable to understand those rules, and the purpose they serve.

As Ahab pointed out, with his editor’s hat on, if you had presented a script to an editor with, “Who’s opinion”, as opposed to “Whose opinion?”, that editor could, or would, depending on the mood he was in, lob it straight onto the slush pile. As a member of a writing group, it’s inconceivable that someone in that group wouldn’t have pointed out your error.

You seem to be grooming your critics, to present their critiques as you want to hear them, not the way they would naturally present them. The essence of those critiques could be misconstrued… positively or negatively.

There wouldn’t be so much noise in the thread, if you’d done as I asked, and thrown the first chapter up here, so we can see what all the fuss is about.
Waitinanticipating
Vic

I don’t see a post by a Michael.

Are you saying that to me ? Or have you posted to the wrong thread ?

I don’t recall ever inferring that.

It is ‘possible’. But it is also ‘possible’ that I might receive some useless and damaging answers, considering the people in such a group could be fans of completely different genres or even inept or rude at how they would respond.

We must be talking at cross purposes here … what rules are you taking about ? And wasn’t it you who wrote above “if you follow all the rules, all the time, you will write the same novel as every other rule follower.” ? or was that someone else using your name ?

Well I haven’t read this much utter drivel for quite a long time. Interesting to find that it pops up in supposedly classy forums like this and not just in trash piles.

Don’t hold your breath.

provisional response to :unamused:

I think vic-k might be a bit more on target than you are willing to accept. If not, why the seemingly hostile response? Let’s look at a few facts:

  1. Cherry picking reviewers based on how they might respond and how that response impacts you emotionally.
  2. Minor critiques receive a very negative response.
  3. The assumption that the novice already understands the factors shaping the responses of the “masters” of the trade.

As a “first time writer” who is requesting advice, it would seem out of the norm to defend your current actions when folks who are not “first time writers” are telling you to alter those actions. If you want to write for anything more than your own personal enjoyment (and there is nothing wrong with that) then you need to be able to receive criticism with open arms.

And if you want truly impartial and professional opinions that don’t cost you anything but a little pride (maybe), do as vic-k suggested and post a section of your work. There are professional editors (ahab and floss two name two to GET PAID TO CRITIQUE WRITING FOR A LIVING), widely published authors, folks from all walks of life who politely provide input. It is entirely up to you how you receive the advice given.

And to that end, I realized very quickly that my writing was personal (just for me) based on what I posted. Sometimes is it more about understanding yourself than anything else.

Just Come in.
I have a few points to add to Jaysen’s, as well as answering some of saoir’s, when I’ve had me dinna!
vic

vic-k wrote:
saoir, or Michael, 'tis Michael, isn’t it?
I don’t see a post by a Michael.
You won’t. That was me being smartarsed. As you well know. Saoir has an Irish look to it. As do my in-laws, all of whom are proficient to one degree or another, in the use of Gaelic. Without thinking too hard about it, what seems to be the most common name amongst the male members of the clans that constitute my ‘in-laws’, is: Michael; Mike; Mikey; Mickey and Mick. So, ‘Michael’, is me adding two and two together and coming up with something twixt three and seven. Of course, my apologies, if you happen to be an Aoife; Gráine; Niamh; Sháuna; or even, Saoirse.

Do you consider yourself too good for “writing groups” to be of any use to you?

Are you saying that to me ? Or have you posted to the wrong thread ? I should’ve thought the answers to those questions are patently obvious. I’ll rephrase the question, though. Given that: “…after a lifetime of enjoying casual writing, and a reputation for good writing in many different situations.” appears to allude to a certain degree of innate/acquired proficiency, do you consider yourself so far along the road of burgeoning author-dom that you don’t need the sevices of the likes of writing groups/classes? while: “I have read a LOT of stories about people asking friends or people in the business to read a sample of their writing to see what they think. At first I though yeah that’s a good idea. Then I asked an in-law who was a published writer and poet. He came back and told me I use sentences that are far too long.

The thing is. I couldn’t see what he meant. I couldn’t see how it was the case. Did you ask him to explain to you why he considered your sentences to be too long? Did he offer you the rationale in substantiation of his opinion; present a reasoned argument in defense of his critique? That put me off the whole thing for more than ten years. <–Indicates, p’rhaps, a possible, over sensitivity to criticism? Not Joking… Deadly serious.
Since then I have reread these and more stories about what some people do and become more and more jaundiced about the whole principle of the idea. I see people publishing excerpts online to get opinions. I see people going to writing classes and reading out excerpts for opinions.

Ad yet I cannot get away from believing that it is a deeply misguided thing to do. We have absolutely no idea what tastes in reading these people have. What misconceptions they have. We have no idea what ‘good’ means to them, or how it related to what ‘good’ means to us, or to someone else.

You’re disparaging :unamused: of most avenues at your disposal for seeking criticism.
Except… Whilst vociferously insisting that you don’t want to know if he LIKES your novel, any one having read your posts will point out to you that, as far as your exec buddy is concerned, there is no room for doubting that, according to you, he does, since his initial reaction was to be impressed, and to ask for more. No indication from you, as to his response to your: “
… tell me if there are any fractures in how I write. Anything that he feels is a ‘problem’. Is my quoting ok, are my characters not credible.”

How do you know that your exec buddy’s opinions are any more valid than those you would’ve received from a writing group, at your local library, for instance?

I don’t recall ever inferring that. Ididn’t infer that you did. But it’ is implicit in your enthusiastic endorsement of him for the job, that he is your critic of choice. I would proffer that, that endorsement is very much influenced by the fact that the critic has already expressed an admiration for your first time literary endeavor.

You as a member of the aforementioned group, would have the opportunity to pose those exact same questions to the group members, having first presented them with the rationale behind them. It is possible that you would have received a variety of answers, all with something positive to add (as in ‘constructive’), and pertinent to your initial request.

It is ‘possible’. But it is also ‘possible’ that I might receive some useless and damaging answers, considering the people in such a group could be fans of completely different genres or even inept or rude at how they would respond.
If you extrapolate in that same vein, at the same rate, from: "But it is also ‘possible’, you will effectively rid the Cosmos of any entity capable of meaningful, constructive criticism.

Before you throw the rule book through the window, it’s advisable to understand those rules, and the purpose they serve.

We must be talking at cross purposes here … If you so choose?
…what rules are you taking about ? The rules proffered by most competent grammarians, and literary critics pertaining to the accepted norms and standard, regarding serious literary endeavour. And wasn’t it you who wrote above “if you follow all the rules, all the time, you will write the same novel as every other rule follower.” Yes. With emphasis on, all of the rules–all of the time. The bending, twisting and/or abandoning of this or that rule, for this or that purpose, on this or that occasion, is a concept widely, though not universally, encouraged throughout the literary cesspit.

? or was that someone else using your name ? Don’t be silly. But you, with your browbeating of potential critics, to do this-n-that… but not the other, don’t seem able to accept that there are many forms of legit criticism that you may be in need of. What will you do if your buddy tells you your work, " is a masterpiece-in-the making."? I’m not taking the piss there! "“You just have to curb your propensity for too long sentences.” I really would like to read your response to that question.

As Ahab pointed out, with his editor’s hat on, if you had presented a script to an editor with, “Who’s opinion”, as opposed to “Whose opinion?”, that editor could, or would, depending on the mood he was in, lob it straight onto the slush pile. As a member of a writing group, it’s inconceivable that someone in that group wouldn’t have pointed out your error. Actually, Ahab pointed to the error, and I added the possible consequences. A common, but sloppy mistake, yours, not mine, but no comment on your part when Ahab pointed it out, or when I did. Why’s that? We won’t talk about slush piles again.

You seem to be grooming your critics, to present their critiques as you want to hear them, not the way they would naturally present them. The essence of those critiques could be misconstrued… Positively or negatively.

There wouldn’t be so much noise in the thread, if you’d done as I asked, and thrown the first chapter up here, so we can see what all the fuss is about. I was actually looking forward to reading this, and anticipating being impressed, when I first posted that, earlier in the thread..
Waitinanticipating
Vic

Well I haven’t read this much utter drivel for quite a long time. Interesting to find that it pops up in supposedly classy forums like this and not just in trash piles. Fair comment, soair, would you like to highlight any points in support of your statement?
Take care
Vic
PS There was a comment I included in an earlier post, but removed it, because I couldn’t decide if it was wrong. It was to do with my sensing an underlying arrogance to your posts. I’m still not sure if I should have left it in.