Is quite beyond the help of another cup of tea?
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So way beyond that 
@pigfender So i can name him etc?
rocking back and forth more like!
Absolutely. Given him whatever backstory etc you like.
This was Novel in a Week, wasn’t it?
For a moment of levity, one of them could slip and address someone as “Sarg” instead of the customary last name used with equals and subordinate ranked soldiers. Then the rest could tease him about his slip-up for a bit.
“Sarg, where’s my shaving cream?”
“How should I know… Sarge?”
“Screw you.”
“Hey, Sarge, Sarge here’s looking for his shaving cream!”
“Don’t look at me, Sarge, this luxurious beard ain’t seen a razor for a spell.”
“Ya’ll are a-holes.”
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I like this, muchly! 
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Gotta be honest…REALLY struggling with this chapter, guys.
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go for it send me one please
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Okay, this scares me… I think I’m done. This means I"m going to go take a nap and look at it again when I’m freshl- currently at 3351 words
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Are you saying we can’t have any kissing?
There has to be a market for a gay military thriller, surely?
If you want dancing, kissing or swimming with dolphins in your chapter, that’s your call! 
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@Susan67 Is that a prescribed ratio? I’m way down on target. 
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For those looking for some words of encouragement…
FOUR HOURS TO GO!
What about language? Any ratings applicable? F bombs allowable? (That’s as far as I’d go)
It’s the Army…F bombs are like vowels to them…
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That isn’t encouraging…Anxiety-inducing, maybe…
Anxiety levels shooting through the roof what is Dehmari in appearance???
I think I hate you! That’s so not fair.
Can I have those you decide not to use, pretty please.
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